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Unravelled by ~Zellyn-Skyy:iconZellyn-Skyy:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Spiritual > Open


When I speak
I cringe
My words are a poison
you so lovingly drink

I see the compassion
anticipation
love
hate
and
lust

swelling up behind those
perfectly dark pupils
shuddering and quivering...
and you drink my venom down

i shudder with each beat of your heart
fearing
dreading
praying
it wont be your last

but you will keep breathing my toxins
and your skin shivers in in desire
for my bitter sweet affection
I simply wish I could spare you from

but love is a poison...
we all must drink...
©2006-2009 ~Zellyn-Skyy
:iconzellyn-skyy:

Author's Comments

i needed to write something... my dreams were scaring me... i wish theyd stop...


"I sleep because my body demands it... i dream because my mind can't escape it..."

Comments


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~RookTheMurderer Nov 20, 2006, 2:26:09 PM
A little darker than I'd expected from you... It's very nice.
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=SorrowBurn Nov 20, 2006, 3:33:50 PM
Wow, now there's true poetry.

--
Wit + Sarcasm X Misanthropy2 - Amiability + Charm =SorrowBurn

"And when it all came crashin' down, I became withdrawn and the only thing I knew how to do is to keep on keepin' on."
R.Z.
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~isuckatlife Nov 20, 2006, 5:35:30 PM
of course there is no remedy.

--
~ Lost and Confused
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Mood: Anguish ~Zellyn-Skyy Nov 20, 2006, 5:56:47 PM
such is life... especially ours. So semi-charmed are we =\

--
"I'm never alone... I'm alone all the time" -Glycerine by Bush

"I drink away the part of the day that I cannot sleep away..." Modest Mouse

"You're nobody,until somebody loves you"
-Frank Sinatra

"Not all who wander are lost..."
- J.R.R. Tolkie
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~Lillith-Sweetblood Nov 21, 2006, 8:05:01 AM
Dreams the unescapable(or is it inescapable..) torture.

Love is Sugar coated cyanide for the masses

Just pray no one dies.

--
What? Oh I was just gonna go to the incinerator room. Y'know? Burn in the blessed flames of death.
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~browneyedsprite Nov 21, 2006, 3:15:23 PM
Mmm and that venom tastes so good until the giver rips down into your gut and scoops it back out. Ah l'amour, c'est la vie, mon prince. Your best work to date here, in my opinion. My only suggestion is in that third line from the bottom, you end it with a preposition and that stopped the flow of it for me for a minute. But that's a minor point.

--
It is not our abilities that show what we truly are; it is our choices.
:iconraini-tempest:
*Raini-Tempest Nov 24, 2006, 10:30:29 PM
You have just inspired me to write more of my stories. Thanks, I really needed it.
:iconzellyn-skyy:
Mood: Optimism ~Zellyn-Skyy Nov 26, 2006, 4:17:44 PM
:giggle: I cant imagine myself inspiring anything :blush:

I am glad the poem did something for you :aww:

--
"I'm never alone... I'm alone all the time" -Glycerine by Bush

"I drink away the part of the day that I cannot sleep away..." Modest Mouse

"You're nobody,until somebody loves you"
-Frank Sinatra

"Not all who wander are lost..."
- J.R.R. Tolkie
:iconraini-tempest:
*Raini-Tempest Nov 26, 2006, 4:53:58 PM
Good poems are only possible with good poets. :D
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