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Life
        A sieve...
    sifting sugar & sand
   filtering subconsciously
   flowing uncontrollably
    rough to the touch
    yet smooth in its motion
    dropping in bitter bursts
      speckled with sweetness, sublime
        till the sieve is emptied
          and only the memories remain...
©2005-2009 ~Zellyn-Skyy
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Life comes and goes so fast... the bitter moments seem to stand out... while wonderful ones seem to go unnoticed far too often.. think about things before your sieve has emptied as well

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i like this peom, but i don't like the word "pile" at the end. i don't know exactly why, i just don't think it flows?

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A man's face is his autobiography. A woman's face is her work of fiction. - Oscar Wilde
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Very nice! Pile does sound a bit rough, but I like it!

Anna

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BAND AID!! :blowkiss:
Look what Isumi-Kun made me!!! And what KiraxChan made me!!!
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:shocked: Flawless...that is all I can think to say.

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"I charge, attack, and mount to the assault
As worms attack a corpse within a vault.
And cherish even the coldness that you boast,
By which, harsh beast, you subjugate me most." - Charles Baudelaire
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I really like it...has a very nice flow to it..very well structured dude..muy bien!

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"The big bang? Wasn't that a massive sex orgy?" -some random idiot... -.-;;;;

Keep it (sic):headbang:

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April 26, 2005
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